Exiled #miniflash #romance #naramalone
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A piece of you is still in me
Still here and it can’t be lost
The peace of you is still in me
Still here still with you gone
When loneliness swamped me
Caught out in a paper boat
Still here, your peace bailed with me
That piece we could not drown
When fortune’s hunt yields pyrite veins
When frost collides with hope
It’s your peace that keeps me sane
Still here still with you gone
I’ve been exiled from paradise
Soul’s pockets emptied of all that shines
But there’s a well worn path to where peace lies
I’m waiting there for you
A piece of you is still in me
I’ll wait there for you
~ Nara Malone
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13 Comments
Berowne
Excellent writing…
izzy
I really like the rhythm and images it is very like a song!
Brian Miller
nice…thre is a great rhythm to this….and the piece still in you…and you waiting right there…this is endearing…i can feel the longing and the missing…
gsb
your writing and your blog are very provacative…do I feel the murmer of memories buried so long ago?…naw…oh what the hell..absolutely
Old Grizz
Green Speck
Well expressed …. loved it ….
oldegg
Grief and loss are powerful expressions of love which you have demonstrated so well in your poem.
totomai
first, liked the picture a lot.
the poem is full of emotions…. longing…
Robyn Greenhouse
Beautiful picture, beautiful poem full of hope for that someone's return.
Lady In Read
piece and peace .. still within and gone without.. loved it
jaerose
I love the contrast between the paper boat and the hope and the knowing that is so concrete..long may we wait for that person who helps us feel peace..jae
Ann (bunnygirl)
This is beautiful, and I love the picture, too!
Other Mary
This is wonderful. I particularly like the lines:
When fortune's hunt yields pyrite veins
When frost collides with hope
andrewgearypoetry
There a few good lines such as "When loneliness swamped me / Caught out in a paper boat" and the lines Other Mary quoted as well, but I don't know if L3 and L4 in S1 are really necessary.