Going Down Blues (jazz poetry)
Count me in
baby
sing
we’re going
down
down
Down into red blues
down where
nightmares can’t dream
Pitch the canned heat
keep the beat
slick licks
burning through
jelly rolls
riffing
Tangle in my dark
baby
black cat bone
drumming skin
down
We rain harmony
syrup
dusting your broom
wash it
down
simmer down jam
jamming
you free
Rhythm going liquid
milk spilling
down
honey
going down
blues
~Nara Malone
This is my contribution to G-man’s Friday 55 and dVersePoets Meeting the Bar.
I’ll confess. I tried and tried to beat this down to 55. The best I could do was 69. I tried to beat it down to jazz, but it came out blues.
22 Comments
Brian Miller
Tangle in my dark
baby
black cat bone
drumming skin
down
ha. nice…really cool creativity and word play in this…rain down harmony…nice…smooth and sensual…
Heaven
Whew, we're going down those blues ~ Rhythm going liquid & honey, love it ~
Mary
This really has a beautifully sensual feel to it. Well done, Nara!
G-Man
Nara Malone…?
You are such a Vixen!
A talented and sensual and Hot one at that!
I just love double entendre.
If I can't get a 55 out of you, I'll settle for 69!
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
Alice Audrey
Tsk. Don't you know you can't beat down the blues? They're already down with it.
– Alice
Margaret
Now that is a sizzlin' 69 – you can save the 55 for next week! I'm quite taken with the "Tangle in my dark baby" stanza! Wow.
Claudia
oh la la…. love me some decent blues…smiles
howanxious
Sensual and blue-ey. The repeating of 'down' gave it a nice feel. I enjoyed reading it.
gabriellaswritingcorner
There is great rhythm in the piece Nara!.Lovely done!
Marina Sofia
And a very nice, sensuous, wailing blues tone it has to it, too! There is a sort of downward rhythm to it, as if it's being dragged to the floor. Perfect for the atmosphere!
freyawrites.com
This is downbeat, sultry, musical, heavy. I see a dark jazz club, a singer wrapped around a microphone, a snare drum whispering underneath a brush….
Björn
This is really velvety cool… love the bluesy tone… yes really slick
Beachanny
Hey honeypie the blues is jazz. This is fine, sinuous, sensual, and definitely JAZZY. Sometimes 55 is a hard number to fit, but this sings to me. Thanks for hanging at the party Nara!
hedgewitch
Great flow and rhythm, and the words couldn't fit the theme better, however many you used.
razzamadazzle
Love the rhythm here!
Vanessa V Kilmer
I see a couple dancing very slowly.
Mystic_Mom
Sensual, beautiful and smooth!
TALON
Somehow I don't think G-Man would mind 69…ummmm…words. Especially this because they're so silky and rhythmic and beautiful.
grapeling
sly, Nara 🙂
Susie Clevenger
Lovin' this bluesy sensual piece…http://susiessentences.blogspot.com/2013/09/karmas-bitch.html
Other Mary
Oooof – who wouldn't want those blues? Great write!
Ann (bunnygirl)
Beautiful and sexy. Who cares that it's not 55?